First Edit: The Solvent Blues/Solvent

[just mercedes]

Hey Mercedes,
Thanks for the feedback. This one was a mess on my page when I wrote out, so I appreciate the suggestions about the wording.

Thanks again,
Richard

I like the scene, the depiction of contrasts showing the problems that exist between the couple. A woman cleaning always brings to my mind Lady Macbeth, and this adds another layer to your poem for me i.e. is he responsible for her being this way? Has she become this, to please him?

Looking forward to seeing where you go from here.