04-03-2018, 04:39 AM
It's easy to visualize these parents, Danny. They might also be most sets of grandparents I've seen.
I realize it's not a critique forum but I think the poem works just fine without L2.
You could restructure
L1
L3
L4
(Strophe break)
L5
Best,
Todd
I realize it's not a critique forum but I think the poem works just fine without L2.
You could restructure
L1
L3
L4
(Strophe break)
L5
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson