02-23-2018, 09:50 AM
I prefer the original, commas and all. 
For me the poem has lost its cadence and been cluttered up with wordy details that are not integral to the story the N is telling me and that are robbing me of the detail the poem inspired me to think of on my own. JMHO
For me the poem has lost its cadence and been cluttered up with wordy details that are not integral to the story the N is telling me and that are robbing me of the detail the poem inspired me to think of on my own. JMHO
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