One evening in Spain

[nibbed]

Hi just mercedes-


Madrid in darkness                              -I want a comma here
lit only by flashes from
Luftwaffe bombs.

On a downtown rooftop
refugees, poets, and painters            -three is well balanced, but why it seems someone might be
in fancy-dress                                         missing, I don't know...
drink champagne, dance and sing
while around them                              -awkward, but I tried to reword it and came up
death rains.                                            empty-handed, perhaps a change of words?

What madness they share!               -here's a clever change of judgement to reason
Pablo Neruda, César Vallejo,
Octavio Paz, even Siqueiros
the Mexican, in his shiny
cavalry boots.                                        -really amazing word because it looks like another word
                                                                                                           and switches the mind in thought
What joy.                                               -the switch: was this meant to take me to two places?
                                                                         because it did. Psalm 146 and the song
                                                    His Grace is Sufficient.



As always, brilliant poetry with a lesson.
I like how it is worked that I don't necessarily
have to be learned in the subjects to enjoy the poem.
Sorry I couldn't be much more help...
and I apologize for my wonky script.
Thank you for the privilege to read and critique
your always-amazing poetry.


-nibbed