The Rise and Fall of Delusion.EDIT 0.000001 vaga
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(12-29-2017, 12:52 AM)tectak Wrote:   
The last long breath that draws us stumbling
back in to a world now real,
leaves us stripped
of all delusion.
Now blind
at last,
I see.
 
 Tectak(feeling fine)2017

3rd line from end. Is that better vaga?
well, in my opinion, yes.
nihilism not gone but changed in a way that makes sense to me (, who probably uses the word nihilism in a wrong way)
i like the twist "stripped of all delusion/ now blind"
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RE: The Rise and Fall of Delusion. - by vagabond - 12-29-2017, 01:32 AM
RE: The Rise and Fall of Delusion. - by tectak - 01-03-2018, 09:06 PM
RE: The Rise and Fall of Delusion. - by Erthona - 01-03-2018, 05:03 AM
RE: The Rise and Fall of Delusion. - by nibbed - 01-03-2018, 12:38 PM
RE: The Rise and Fall of Delusion.EDIT 0.000001 vaga - by vagabond - 01-03-2018, 11:13 PM



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