The Little Clockses

[dukealien]

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I like the side by side structure, though it was very confusing when I first read this on my phone because the verses were all in the wrong places.  But reading it again as it was meant to be seen, I must say I like the set up.

I see the problem with narrower screens now (when will the little clockses grow strong enough to forcefully twist themselves - our wrists with them - into landscape orientation for lines too long, recognizing poetry - or train us to do it on command?)  The 90-degree slant rhyme would probably work as well (or as poorly) with the second stanza below the first.  Getting it to (sort of) work was a silly project for a lazy afternoon; glad it doesn't come across as too affected.

Thanks to all for the reads.