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Virtual reality -
Don't believe everything you see. (yawn cliche 'don't swallow that shit you see/that shit ain't what it seems to be)
Nothing's what it seems to be
in virtual reality.

So much fun in the sun: (yawn granpa repeating old sayings from the war years, 'so much undone that may be fun"
flex your guns and burn your buns.  (hmm flexy rubber guns????)
You'll think you've won, second to none,
but when it's all said and done, (OMG said and done b4 a million times - 'when it's so cooked it's overdone")
you'll be stunned how the story's spun.

Nose to the grind, what do you find? (shove something else on the grindstone pleeeeasseee)
Try to unwind and you're left behind. (neato gotta be upwardly mobile its pc)
You'll think they're kind, 'til they speak their mind,
but they can't dull your shine ('stuff up' in place of 'dull'????) At some point I tried to combine as many rhymes and short cliches as possible around a central theme, drone out like a virtual reality
if you're deaf, dumb, and blind.

So much strain on your brain,
but pain is gain so dont complain.
Try to refrain from another refrain, (too many refrains... rephrase!) Making this change thank you!
explain it plain, or entertainment's
down the drain.   (hmm this line seems a bit circumcised in comparison to the rest)

Virtual reality -
Don't believe everything you see.
Nothing's what it seems to be
in virtual reality.



gee you oughta rinse this sponge under the tap and squeeze out all yesterdays leftovers u've picked up with it, but it's pretty cool and love alliteration so i'll let you off can't argue that! Saving grace
cheers for the mindwipe thanks again!