10-27-2017, 09:31 PM
Many thanks, Todd, both for your excellent critique and for reminding me why I keep inflicting this poetry business on myself 
I will definitely address the ending as it's always seemed imperfect to me, though the concept needs to remain... ah, challenges!

I will definitely address the ending as it's always seemed imperfect to me, though the concept needs to remain... ah, challenges!
It could be worse
