Edit 1: She is not my grandmother

[Knot]

Hi Rose,

I like the opening (except for closed eyes) and the overall idea, but, to me it seems to lack focus.
I think you could develop the 'painted alien face' (which is a phrase I like) across the whole piece.
Put some specific details in an elaborate on (how you react to each of) them (but not the clichéd 'red lips').
Just a suggestion;
A sickly sweet perfume traps me
before a painted alien face.
Blind and coloured in....

reveal the scenario, don't start with it.
(If you could give the impression you were standing
before a painting or a museum exhibit,
the reveal might have more impact)

End with the lines,
Lips flat, no loving smiling,
she is not my grandmother

Best, Knot.