Hoarfrost
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(09-23-2017, 10:09 PM)Yjack123 Wrote:  Hoarfrost
 
 
My head is in opposition (lost clarity here. Is your head in opposition to itself? Or to the shuffling?as I shuffle the dusted planks of the room.
My coffee and I ease into cushions to let the pills apply themselves.
Eyes lightly closed against everything.
 
I tug them open again and discover the moment.
I spy gemstone hoarfrost on one corner of my window, Not a fan of "I spy"  
A single pane high up frames the splayed web of rainbow dust, splayed is nice here
The sunlit frost pushing through my haze: its splendor keeping me buoyant.
I; embarrassed for unrealized accomplishments. what?  Why not just I am?
As concomitant to the time of life enjoyed by the frost.
It seems I have been out-performed and it’s still early.
 
I stretch to see when a man walks past the window.
Dark hair and glasses and a steady gait. not a sentence on its own
There’s temptation to say he came out of nowhere,
But I know that’s not possible.  He has a home, one supposes. 
Both origin and destination remain secrets held from me.
On this particular mission of his. 
Wherever he’s headed. 
I don’t know.
 
Waiting, am I, for the coffee to cool a bit.  I'm waiting. - its not complicated.
Touching the mug with the backs of my fingers I decline. good image
Patience, I have learned, is the only treatment for everything.
 
I would ditch the caps at the line starts. They confuse the sentence structure.
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Messages In This Thread
Hoarfrost - by Yjack123 - 09-23-2017, 10:09 PM
RE: Hoarfrost - by cloud - 09-25-2017, 02:50 AM
RE: Hoarfrost - by Yjack123 - 09-25-2017, 05:33 AM
RE: Hoarfrost - by billy - 09-25-2017, 04:44 PM
RE: Hoarfrost - by Tiger the Lion - 09-26-2017, 12:02 AM
RE: Hoarfrost - by Keith - 09-27-2017, 02:27 AM



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