09-26-2017, 12:02 AM
(09-23-2017, 10:09 PM)Yjack123 Wrote: HoarfrostI would ditch the caps at the line starts. They confuse the sentence structure.
My head is in opposition (lost clarity here. Is your head in opposition to itself? Or to the shuffling?as I shuffle the dusted planks of the room.
My coffee and I ease into cushions to let the pills apply themselves.
Eyes lightly closed against everything.
I tug them open again and discover the moment.
I spy gemstone hoarfrost on one corner of my window, Not a fan of "I spy"
A single pane high up frames the splayed web of rainbow dust, splayed is nice here
The sunlit frost pushing through my haze: its splendor keeping me buoyant.
I; embarrassed for unrealized accomplishments. what? Why not just I am?
As concomitant to the time of life enjoyed by the frost.
It seems I have been out-performed and it’s still early.
I stretch to see when a man walks past the window.
Dark hair and glasses and a steady gait. not a sentence on its own
There’s temptation to say he came out of nowhere,
But I know that’s not possible. He has a home, one supposes.
Both origin and destination remain secrets held from me.
On this particular mission of his.
Wherever he’s headed.
I don’t know.
Waiting, am I, for the coffee to cool a bit. I'm waiting. - its not complicated.
Touching the mug with the backs of my fingers I decline. good image
Patience, I have learned, is the only treatment for everything.