09-12-2017, 02:53 PM
(09-11-2017, 06:43 PM)RiverNotch Wrote: Crickets sing with their legs,The payoff isn't quite that satisfying.
frogs sing with their breasts,
cicadas sing with their wings,
bats sing with their mouths --
lovers sing with all their parts.
Perhaps you could mix it up a bit, eg. Crickets sing with their legs / frogs with the breasts / cicadas wings / bats mouths / lovers / with all their parts.
I also think that the list of things that sing starts to tire after 'cicadas'. If you could keep it to 'cicadas wings / and mouths' that'd be nice, but wouldn't make sense....so I can't suggest an alternative at the moment.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe

