Third Edit: Denial

[Todd]

Hi Richard,

I must have just missed this one until now. Here are some comments on the latest revision.

Nice imagery and metaphor for both denial and the relationship between the two.

Third Edit:

Denial

I am a dark room:
curtains drawn,
mirror made meaningless,
door slammed shut.

I like how the imagery really captures the feeling of denial. The speaker is a dark room. You draw the curtains from the inside. So the speaker is deliberately blocking the light (metaphor for illumination). They don't want to see, lest they see and change. I also like the sounds of mirror made meaningless. Of course, because reflections can't be viewed in the dark. It is the type of denial where the person can't even see themselves clearly in the midst of it. I like that the door is slammed shut. Again, it adds to the intensity of the cocoon the person has wrapped themselves in.

You are a flickering light:--Flickering is a good modifier. What they are trying to keep out isn't a blazing spotlight--the denial has pressed down on the counterargument to such an extent that it is barely evident.
alone in the hall,--The area outside the speaker's mind.
dying slowly,--while this isn't bad maybe replace with a word like quivering which could express both the movement of the light and a sense of fear. It's also possible I guess you could replace flickering above with quivering (a tad more versatile).
easily replaced.--an ominous ending both for the opposing idea and the bearer of that idea.

This feels pretty pulled together to me, Richard. Hope some of the comments help.

Best,

Todd