08-18-2017, 11:33 PM
@Fuzzy: I appreciate the close read. It was helpful while I revised the poem. Thank you
@Wjames: I tried to blend the spoiled milk part in differently--hopefully it eased some of the redundancy.
I also addressed the opening which felt too flat to me.
New revision up.
Thank you, both.
Todd
@Wjames: I tried to blend the spoiled milk part in differently--hopefully it eased some of the redundancy.
I also addressed the opening which felt too flat to me.
New revision up.
Thank you, both.
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson