Prothalamion revisited
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(07-08-2017, 04:02 AM)Achebe Wrote:  thanks, Tiger, Ella.
I have half a mind to throw in a 'shadows' to half-rhyme with 'close' at the expense of 'thronging'....there, I've done it.
@ella - I thought the near / where combo would sound ok, but I guess when / end is more pleasing to the ear.
Shadows is nice sonically, but throngs painted more of a wedding picture for me. You might be able to have your cake and eat it too with "those shadows that throng..." or something like it.
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Prothalamion revisited - by Achebe - 07-08-2017, 01:00 AM
RE: Prothalamion revisited - by Tiger the Lion - 07-08-2017, 02:14 AM
RE: Prothalamion revisited - by ellajam - 07-08-2017, 02:19 AM
RE: Prothalamion revisited - by Achebe - 07-08-2017, 04:02 AM
RE: Prothalamion revisited - by Tiger the Lion - 07-08-2017, 04:16 AM



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