construction (4th edit)

[The Four-Eyed Cat]

construction
 
just the faintest vibration in my frontal lobe                                                             
indicates the sledge-hammer again is at work.                                                                         
but the noise reaches neither my ears nor my mouth,                         I'd restructure the sentence by starting out negatively ("No noise reaches my..")
nor is there pain, cause the brain is a marvel                                      Omit 'cause' & 'the'                  
containing itself.
the hammer crushes something to pieces anew,                                Interesting sentence & sentiment; creating by destroying 
they´re planning more skyskrapers blocking the view.                 
heaven´s anyway gray, like over pompeji,                                        Swap 'gray' with anyway, and omit 'over'
clouds of ashes and dust and a thick neural crust                             Unnecessary Juxtaposition of 'and' 
over brittle affections, illegal connections.                                       Why illegal?
like cold lava creeping the concrete obstructs
all the secret game trails and dusty tear ducts.

any type of comment is appreciated. maybe someone knows a better title for this

Interesting poem Vaga! It made me remember how much i hate my neighbour who starts drilling at 07:30 on my free days. Aside from that it made me think about lobotomy as well.