The Wife

[Todd]

The Wife
 
He still had lover's breath--Great first line
as he jumped the elevator--This line adds nothing and could be cut.
twenty minutes before the interview
when she text,
 
Everything will be fine, my darling.--I'd like something a little more surprising or open-ended, something subject to interpretation, a little more dangerous. It needs more oomph to be the payoff we need.

Just some thoughts,

Todd