06-21-2017, 04:53 AM
Hey vagabond and joecarey123,
Thanks for the feedback and thoughts. I decided to be more thorough with the hope in the latest version of the poem because the more I thought about this poem, the more I started to lose focus of what the hope in it was all about. This poem was starting to feel like it was nothing more than a collection of metaphors, so that is why I went in a different direction in the first stanza. I will definitely give your comments some thought as I consider fourth revision.
Thanks again,
Richard
Thanks for the feedback and thoughts. I decided to be more thorough with the hope in the latest version of the poem because the more I thought about this poem, the more I started to lose focus of what the hope in it was all about. This poem was starting to feel like it was nothing more than a collection of metaphors, so that is why I went in a different direction in the first stanza. I will definitely give your comments some thought as I consider fourth revision.
Thanks again,
Richard
Time is the best editor.