06-04-2017, 06:28 PM
(06-04-2017, 12:49 PM)Richard Wrote: DenialOn the whole I like the idea and image. I think you could work on L3/4. How is the mirror made meaningless? Is it cloaked? Has the silver peeled off? Same with L4, something more visceral would be nice. Hot like temptation is a bit cliche, you might work on that.
I am a dark room:
curtains drawn,
mirror made meaningless,
consciousness defiled by the unconscious.
You are the light
shining against my window,
hot like temptation.
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