05-18-2017, 09:15 AM
Ok, if I missed the point or I'm just a shitty reader, feel free to step around the points which miss the point. No worries.
What I don't understand is, if the poem is intended to be about you and your feelings, why is so much of it concentrating on the world outside? If you want to focus on you, turn the focus inward and keep it there.
I don't think there's any "should" when it comes to reader response -- people see what they see, and it's individual.
I wonder what kind of response you would like from the reader. I think a good poem should be written for the reader. I don't see that happening here.
Unfortunately, a lot of the questions you're posing to me I simply can't answer. Only you know what you want to convey.
I wish I could help more.
Best to you, Crundle.
Lizzie
What I don't understand is, if the poem is intended to be about you and your feelings, why is so much of it concentrating on the world outside? If you want to focus on you, turn the focus inward and keep it there.
I don't think there's any "should" when it comes to reader response -- people see what they see, and it's individual.
I wonder what kind of response you would like from the reader. I think a good poem should be written for the reader. I don't see that happening here.
Unfortunately, a lot of the questions you're posing to me I simply can't answer. Only you know what you want to convey.
I wish I could help more.
Best to you, Crundle.
Lizzie