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[Lizzie]

i can in minutia see how someone could confuse grooming with dog keeping  

this however is quite haunting. i know adults who are still as pets due to such horrible actions. the I don't like couplet shows the lack of emotion i can only presume doesn't exist. what really hits home with the piece is the ownership of the child by the adult and the brazenness and pride shown. a horrible poem indeed but a good one. no in-depth as it strikes a chord in me. if i dwell on the pem it elicits a tear or two.  

Yes, you're right about the grooming bit -- it's a little like training.

Thanks for letting me know what resonated with you. It's a difficult piece, no question.

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Achebe: thanks for taking the time. I'm always interested to hear what you have to say about the sonics.

burrealist: thanks for coming back and clarifying your points. All is taken into consideration.

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tectak: much to think about in your critique, many thanks! It's unfortunate that the piece is lacking in poetry, when that should be a prerequisite....

I have a terrible time adding things in after the initial write. I shall keep trying. Thank you.