melatonin

[rayheinrich]

Ha, that's a whole different poem.

yeah, would be real hard to make any sense of it thinking about skin colour

No, it made perfect sense, living by the pull of the moon, weeping at dawn. Though it did make me interpret Ray's comment as he may have a disorder or be a vampire.

(see below)

honestly, though it felt to me a lot like a mistake, it still made sense referring to melanin, in the same sunburnt sense ella noted; that was more on ray's comment, though i did also hope you would address it. to me, it's not really different -- it's a little less interesting, but a lot, lot cleaner.

Oh! I wish I'd been a bit more observant when I read it. I misinterpreted the spelling because I am,
at heart, a creature of science who yearns to chatter on and on about it.

But yes; "melanin", as well as making perfect sense, makes for a much more compelling poem.
While "melatonin" is nicely cerebral, "melanin" entangles us in the visceral complexities of race.


P.S. I possess a professionally-diagnosed disorder. (And even if I was a vampire, I'd lie and say I wasn't,
because being one has become inordinately déclassé.