05-12-2017, 04:37 AM
(05-12-2017, 04:13 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:(05-11-2017, 01:53 PM)vagabond Wrote: melanin
It is too warm and too bright
radiating, all over, this light
the moon is my sun
gentle, indirect one
in the calm of the night
she rises the tides
breakfast for dinner again
wipe my tears, 7 a.m.
Good poem. I especially liked "the moon is my sun" theme.
Maybe "wipe my tears" needs a few words farther up in the poem to put it in context. i intended that with "she rises the tides" .. gravity drawing water. tears are not a bad thing per se, hiding them is.
And oh how I know this condition! (That I use it to avoid human contact seeking the "calm of the night" is another story altogether. )