05-11-2017, 12:33 AM
(05-10-2017, 11:42 PM)Szczepan Wrote: OK been thinkin' about it (and it hurts my head!)I have a problem with begotten, for me it's a word used in religious texts and nowhere else, so if that's why you're using it I guess I'm just missing its relationship to logic. If you're using it for the rhyme I'd drop it. What sayeth you?
Let's take it a coupla lines at a time....If this revision to the 1st 2 and last 2 lines, sounds like I'm more on the right track, it'll help me make further revisions:
Shoot the breeze all ‘round logic trees from ideas only just begotten.
Root square and cube stored in vacuum tube computed then forgotten.
What sayeth you all?
PS I am going for a "list poem" as Janine mentioned tho' I didn't really know it from the get go...
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