Wrath Like Thunder (Revision 3)

[Lizzie]

Hi, Todd. I've read this several times, and it's beauty always strikes me. The imagery is vivid.

The title is strong -- makes me want to read. I like how thunder ties in with the water/flood angle.

I have a couple of thoughts.

The blood was a whisper -- I don't think you need 'the.' I'd make it more specific whose blood or just leave it off completely. Right off the bat, I like the contrast of thunder in the title with the whisper. I think it's interesting how the poem starts off soft and then becomes louder and more violent as the poem goes along. Kind of like a relationship that starts out loving and sweet and then turns violent.
beneath the soil
damp with accusation -- nice
as the mist that once rose. -- I can infer that the mist was rising from the soil, but I might include a couple of words that clarify where it's coming from -- something that re-inforces this idea of water/emotion welling up from the deep
Until I held the world -- I might consider starting a new strophe here since the focus changes from the others to the speaker. I think you could add some more story or detail in between, since it goes right from super quiet to all-out rage -- maybe more of a natural escalation. 
under water, matching murder
drop-for-drop -- like these last two lines. Matching murder is nice.
with no one left to cry out. -- good return to the first line with cry out contrasted with whisper. "Until....cry out" is not a complete sentence though.

I love it as is, but I'd like to read more. Might just be a style choice, since you're a champion of compact-ness.

I've always been fascinated with the human-ness of the Old Testament God, and this is a nice vignette of that impulsiveness/emotionality that contrasts with God-in-the-abstract found in the gospel of John, for instance.

Always enjoy your work.

Lizzie