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[burrealist]

Hi burrealist

I hope you are not discouraged. Please don't think you suck at poetry. 
Discouragement becomes inspiration. I keep saying I appreciate harsh, honest critiques. Feeling discouraged will not stop me, and I appreciate your concern as well.  

I know I will probably get in trouble, but may I play with your words? Maybe even a poem about a discouraged poet can be found in them. I am not trying to rewrite your poem, just pointing out the wonderful words you have written.
Yes, I love seeing my work in someone else's creativity. If there could be a whole thread dedicated to rewriting other poems, that would be my favorite thread.


Ascend crooked steps
to broken walls:

Smudge a faint sky
(memory is shaded
beneath grey tiles)

draw a ladder
with a tree,

throw my body
to the ground,

Paper White.



I hope you find comfort and peace today and are inspired not to give up.
janine
Thank you!