The Absurdity of Attempting the Answer / Edit May 11

[Josiah]

If you like the internal rhymes keep them. If you think the rhymes are damaging clarity or misrepresenting the content remove them.

I think that's more of a stylistic choice honestly.

OK. Makes sense. This is going to be a tough edit. If I make things too understandably cut-and-dry, it defeats the purpose.

This is going to take a few  hikes, maybe a couple of long drives and some good ol' head scratchin' to strike a balance.

I really don't think you should change the poem to make it more understandable. You've got a lot of metaphors and imagery that just make it enjoyable to read. Someone doesn't have to understand every word of the poem to get the idea of it. I honestly didn't see any of it over complicated.