04-25-2017, 10:33 PM
I loved this!
For me it was actually the repetition of 'I just want to be able to say' that made it for me.
It gripped me to read on, and somehow expressed the urgency of what is being said.
Almost like you were interrupting a conversation or making your point across a noisy room.
The punchline is a bit of relief and a great payoff.
Well done!
For me it was actually the repetition of 'I just want to be able to say' that made it for me.
It gripped me to read on, and somehow expressed the urgency of what is being said.
Almost like you were interrupting a conversation or making your point across a noisy room.
The punchline is a bit of relief and a great payoff.
Well done!