Fifth Edit: On a Day Like This

[Elizazile]

I found this to be very sweet and sad. I thought Lines 7-10 were especially impactful, and I appreciated that it rhymed while also being imagery that was integral to the poem.  With line 13 being so long, I'm supposing that must be purposeful (something to do with the word 'chasing' and it being a long chase?) but in general I am not positive what it is trying to accomplish.
I also think you could delete "coming" from L6 and then maybe combine L5 and L6? could maybe be 'With the draft from the window'
Thank you for this piece