haiku practice
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I looked at them all. There are four that I have a question about.

(04-08-2017, 05:43 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  For inspiration, here are some Issa haiku that were translated by Robert Hass:
This first one is my favorite haiku:

The world of dew
is the world of dew.
And yet, and yet ... 
I like this one, too.

Her row veering off,
the peasant woman plants
toward her crying child.
I also like this one.


face of the spring moon-
about twelve years old
I'd say.


Mosquito at my ear—
does he think
I’m deaf? 


All the time I pray to Buddha
I keep on
killing mosquitoes.


Napped half the day;
no one
punished me!
The four I italicized: I don't understand why the last line of each cannot work just as a completion of all second lines. Haiku becomes so confusing when I feel that some lines aren't complete, so what makes them relevant?
Huh
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haiku practice - by burrealist - 04-06-2017, 01:04 AM
RE: haiku practice - by Lizzie - 04-07-2017, 08:42 AM
RE: haiku practice - by Achebe - 04-07-2017, 09:25 AM
RE: haiku practice - by burrealist - 04-08-2017, 05:13 AM
RE: haiku practice - by rayheinrich - 04-08-2017, 05:43 AM
RE: haiku practice - by burrealist - 04-08-2017, 05:55 AM
RE: haiku practice - by rayheinrich - 04-09-2017, 02:54 AM



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