Four Years Old

[Lizzie]

Hi Carrie. Thanks for stopping by.

I feel I'm there in the kitchen and I can sense my mother's motions and the "green" that she saves for the surface. This is an interesting interpretation -- I hadn't thought about how that line could be read as the green only being on the top of the leaf, just on the surface. I suppose I should view the lack of clarity as a flaw, but I think it works either way, so I'll leave it for now.

 I am also a little unsure of the message. Well, there isn't one really. It's what happened -- it just is.

 I want to know more about the brother. I thought about that too, how it's left hanging. Ultimately I decided that the details wouldn't add anything new since we already know that the brother is gone and that he was a companion -- that's all the audience needs to know, really. 

By the end I felt like I was in a daze, rightfully so, but why? 

Overall I loved the airiness of it. Can you say more about what you mean when you say "airiness"? I'm not clear on your meaning.

Thanks for your time and for your kind words.

Lizzie