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03-22-2017, 04:20 PM

(09-25-2011, 12:18 PM)billy Wrote: cutting long grass
with blunt-bladed lawnmower--
wife mocks through window

This one gave me quite a chuckle, thank you. You're short a syllable in the first line, so why not hang the syllable count and trim it all down (pun intended)?

cutting long grass
with blunt blades
wife mocks through window

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haiku - by billy - 09-25-2011, 12:18 PM

RE: haiku - by Wildcard - 09-26-2011, 12:00 AM

RE: haiku - by billy - 09-26-2011, 10:33 AM

RE: haiku - by Leanne - 09-26-2011, 10:52 AM

RE: haiku - by rayheinrich - 03-23-2017, 12:50 PM

RE: haiku - by billy - 09-26-2011, 05:11 PM

RE: haiku - by Lizzie - 03-22-2017, 04:20 PM

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