03-13-2017, 06:03 AM
(02-27-2017, 03:37 AM)Flos Campi Wrote: I think I sense a thud.I love the line, "It slowly thickly spreads." Maybe it's my synesthesia talking, but that is a perfect description of the sensation I feel upon hearing a soft thud in a quiet place.
A silent throb
Now sounds.
It slowly, thickly spreads.
I think I sensed
A thud.
(I think I spoke without much sense
Of thuds, for soon the thrill subsides.)
The form is very effective. Simultaneously a sense of depth and fleetingness. The parenthesis is a lovely touch.
