Pretty Boy
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Thanks for the post! This poem is easy for me to get attached to, because i have been in this situation ( or something similar) recently. I think for me, I just wanted the scene to be described with even more detail. I wanted more texture! I feel like, if the moment or afternoon was so memorable, the fine details would have stuck with the speaker. I liked that halfway through you let the reader know that it was going to be the last time the two are together, but it left me as the reader dying to hear an explanation. If not an explanation of why, a clearer picture of how. Why wasn't there a hand holding conversation of discontent. Why would the significant other just walk away without saying more? The title is 'pretty boy' but i don't know if that really adds to the poem itself. 

*I liked the narrative, and a lot of the language. It definitely spoke to me on a personal level, and for that I thank you. Keep writing and keep posting! 

Operadiva.
Thank you for your time and energy. If you have any thoughts, please let me know. 


Messages In This Thread
Pretty Boy - by Gretel - 04-28-2016, 12:06 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by humility - 04-28-2016, 12:23 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by Gretel - 04-28-2016, 12:47 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by humility - 04-28-2016, 01:11 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by Todd - 04-28-2016, 01:02 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by laltieri0 - 04-28-2016, 08:00 PM
RE: Pretty Boy - by Gretel - 05-07-2016, 03:32 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by Jae Mc Donnell - 05-08-2016, 03:59 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by litQueen - 02-26-2017, 03:23 PM
RE: Pretty Boy - by RiverNotch - 02-27-2017, 01:00 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by nibbed - 02-27-2017, 11:41 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by alyssa - 03-09-2017, 11:26 AM
RE: Pretty Boy - by operadiva - 03-10-2017, 05:18 AM



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