02-28-2017, 05:59 AM
Okay, so mostly a blending of the last two parts into one section with the forceful establishing of the pun to conclude.
The cuts and rearrangements though minor improved the piece, and while I personally don't lean toward puns I can't deny you your artistic privilege.
Best,
Todd
The cuts and rearrangements though minor improved the piece, and while I personally don't lean toward puns I can't deny you your artistic privilege.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson