Thud.

[Lizzie]

I like this more as I continue to read it. There are a few bits that I think you can cut and the poem will read better: I would drop 'Now' from L3 and 'Of thuds' from L8. I would also encourage you to drop the capitals at the beginning of lines when they are not the start of a sentence (example: Of thuds...) It isn't done much anymore. I like the repetition of ess sounds and TH sounds throughout the piece. Looking forward to reading more from you.