Pretty Boy

[litQueen]

I had to read this a few times, but it's relatable. I like the somber vibe it gives off.
 Just a few things...

Pretty Boy
 
We sit together on a log
Looking across the reservoir
 
Admiring the autumn colors
Layered under the blue sky --- This is a bit fluffy... Takes away from what you're trying to convey
 
Yellow, orange, brown and evergreen
Cast reflections serene
 
A quiet breeze sets the tone
for what would be our last afternoon 
 
You’re more quiet than usual - I would put a comma here? Maybe
While I get up to search for bones
 
Fisherman in their boat
Don’t pay us any note
 
A crow calls out overhead
His fortuitous cry piercing the silence
 
What was it you were thinking?
I now know with regret
 
I wish we had sat and held hands
and confessed our hearts’ discontent
 
Perhaps we could have saved ourselves from anguish
Perhaps we could have saved what was left  - "what was left".. I really like the way it sounds with "Hearts' discontent" 
 
For that quiet afternoon this past October
was our last meeting as lovers