Answer the Wind

[muteyy]

Hello mcauburn! Without reading what others have written to keep things as simple as possible, I feel your rhyming is a bit forced. In some lines, it feels like you are adding additional words to get to a rhyme that you see in your head. I understand, and appreciate that in one sense, however, in the other sense it makes it difficult on the reader to actually read. I know personally, I had a flow with how I was taking in your poem, but then there would be lines where I was completely thrown off my course and that led me to lose my focus on what was being said.

After re-reading the poem, I really enjoyed what you were trying to put across. (Given that it is my mind, not others.) I enjoy music, although I do not practice it myself, I can understand the quarrels one might face while practicing, and perfecting that art form. So I believe with a little rework, you could really accomplish a lot with this.