02-23-2017, 02:41 AM
I like a happy poem about music, but as Kole has pointed out, you need to tighten the rhythm, and I'd perhaps try to use more concrete imagery.
Also the last two lines sounded a bit over-sexual, although maybe I'm just being childish (It often happens)
Also the last two lines sounded a bit over-sexual, although maybe I'm just being childish (It often happens)

