Answer the Wind
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I can relate to the content of the poem, but much of it feels cliche (e.g. there is no despair, right at home). also, i think you're going for a fixed rhythm, but a few lines aren't rhythmic (e.g. rolling until there, riffing until i feel).

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Answer the Wind - by mcauburn - 02-22-2017, 01:47 PM
RE: Answer the Wind - by kolemath - 02-23-2017, 12:51 AM
RE: Answer the Wind - by mcauburn - 02-24-2017, 03:12 AM
RE: Answer the Wind - by Donald Q. - 02-24-2017, 04:13 AM
RE: Answer the Wind - by Donald Q. - 02-23-2017, 02:41 AM
RE: Answer the Wind - by Flos Campi - 02-25-2017, 08:35 AM
RE: Answer the Wind - by Shelrabbi - 02-25-2017, 04:17 PM
RE: Answer the Wind - by muteyy - 02-26-2017, 02:31 AM
RE: Answer the Wind - by pbillyc - 03-06-2017, 10:14 PM
RE: Answer the Wind - by worros - 03-07-2017, 02:27 PM



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