Fly

[Lizzie]

Oh, I didn't think you meant that the speaker floated. I was saying to maybe address the fly from the beginning as 'you' since you move toward that a few lines in. It sounded like the fly was going to be spoken about in the third person and then the voice changed to second, at least to my reading. If I'm wrong, no worries.

Yeah, I think that ending is much better since it's simpler and cleaner.  

In a sense, narrators always speak for the collective as well as the individual.