02-08-2017, 03:57 AM
I love it! I'm not a dad, but I'm a five-star uncle so I can somewhat relate to this poem. Haha! The other day my nephew was eating some fruit, with whipped cream and chocolate syrup in a waffle bowl when he asked me if he had a mustache. He had chocolate all over his face so I told him he was working on a full beard. A really great poem. It made my day a bit happier.
(02-08-2017, 02:30 AM)hesawacko Wrote:
another dad poem...
LOVING HANDS
Always sticky
Always grabbing
Always clinging
Where have they been?
What have they touched?
When were they clean?
Now, they’re here
Rubbing my face I think I would remove lines 1 and 2 here. The clinging in S1/L3 gets this point across.
Your hands letting me know I would change "letting" to"let".
We share everything
Like your runny nose I would suggest replacing "like" with "including".