02-04-2017, 07:49 AM
If you need to ask whether you're being lazy, you know the answer. 
Kidding aside, I do think the "hem" of it is left unfinished. But, that's a style choice. If you did nothing else with it, I'd still love it; but there is room at the end to wrap up or take things in an unexpected direction. I don't feel like one option is better than another, but I'd be interested in reading a few ideas for another stanza at the end if you are so inclined.
You could always get her and her brother back together at the end.
Maybe she could find some peace or self-acceptance. Maybe she could accidentally fall on her sword during a stage production and horrify the front row with a grotesque, bloody scene.
Wait, what just happened to serious workshopping??? We're allowed to be arseholes now? Sweet. -- if after all this time you still believe this is acceptable feedback for this forum, and you are still incapable of reading forum guidelines, then you weren't waiting for our permission to be an arsehole/ Admin
Kidding aside, I do think the "hem" of it is left unfinished. But, that's a style choice. If you did nothing else with it, I'd still love it; but there is room at the end to wrap up or take things in an unexpected direction. I don't feel like one option is better than another, but I'd be interested in reading a few ideas for another stanza at the end if you are so inclined.
You could always get her and her brother back together at the end.
Maybe she could find some peace or self-acceptance. Maybe she could accidentally fall on her sword during a stage production and horrify the front row with a grotesque, bloody scene.Wait, what just happened to serious workshopping??? We're allowed to be arseholes now? Sweet. -- if after all this time you still believe this is acceptable feedback for this forum, and you are still incapable of reading forum guidelines, then you weren't waiting for our permission to be an arsehole/ Admin