Corridor [edit]

[dukealien]

Thanks to all the excellent critics.  The vote was about balanced on keeping the last stanza, but that was half "cut it!" and half "well, it *could* stay," so it's cut (with Quixillated's suggestion for partial salvage implemented).

edit1;

Morning, riding,
sun behind my back:
up loomed a water hazard
pop-up sprinklers either side
drenching grass and path.
 
Were they regulated
wetting only shoes and legs?
No – chilling water-mist
blew cheerless in-between, face-high.
Joylessly I pressed ahead
 
and found each fan of droplets reached
became a glory – halls of rainbow veil
regaled the eye, each lovely as the next
all unexpected, corridor of color
bracing blaze of clear, emprismed light.

Thought about changing the title to "Risk Corridor," but current readers might look for a political message, so stet.