11-18-2016, 11:51 PM
In answer to your questions Duke. If you mean this to read like a parable than the summary stanza is appropriate. I personally don't like them--but it's a style choice in a lot of ways. I also actually liked emprismed. Others may disagree. I guess it depends on your view of such things.
It's a pleasing read. My only real call out is that the diction seems a mix of contemporary and old. We have sun at my five o’clock along with false seemings. It seems a bit out of place.
It's a pleasing read. My only real call out is that the diction seems a mix of contemporary and old. We have sun at my five o’clock along with false seemings. It seems a bit out of place.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson