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Wisdom Tooth Extraction
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10-18-2016, 01:35 PM
(10-18-2016, 01:01 PM)just mercedes Wrote: I'm not happy with the order of your stanzas - I want the second and third to change places, otherwise for me the transition from wakefulness at 2 a.m. to the tooth extraction feels too abrupt. Then the first two stanzas deal with the narrator's response to the situation, and the last two observe what happened from somewhere outside the situation.Sure, I'll give it a shot. |
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Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by Brownlie - 10-18-2016, 11:30 AM
RE: Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by just mercedes - 10-18-2016, 01:01 PM
RE: Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by Brownlie - 10-18-2016, 01:35 PM
RE: Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by Zara - 10-20-2016, 06:24 AM
RE: Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by CRNDLSM - 10-22-2016, 07:43 AM
RE: Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by Brownlie - 10-22-2016, 01:53 PM
RE: Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by Wjames - 10-23-2016, 05:21 AM
RE: Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by Brownlie - 10-23-2016, 03:22 PM
RE: Wisdom Tooth Extraction - by Sparkydashforth - 12-03-2016, 07:00 AM
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