10-12-2016, 04:54 PM
(10-12-2016, 04:26 AM)kolemath Wrote: you say I flatten myselfHi kole - this one read to me like a bunch of disjointed sentences. Unless there's a compelling argument from beauty, I think a poem needs to make sense when written out without the line breaks.
but what is two dimensional?
the other side of your wall
my hissing clan at rest ... incomplete sentence?
until the floor reverberations smooth .... I am struggling to understand the literal meaning of these lines
TV glow we know
corridors of baseboards
byways through this space before and after
95% of species
that 5% you miss
So while I got the oblique reference to roaches surviving the Permian extinction + 'surviving' pest control generally, it's not clear to me why the point couldn't have been made with punctuation and sentence structure within the poetic form.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe

