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[Donald Q.]

Thanks for the further feedback guys, really helpful. I'm a bit torn over this poem, I feel like it's still not quite right to me, and I'm not sure how heavily to edit it. I think it's probably correct to say that the last line can go, and some of the stanzas, like the lift one, need overhaul/deletion. Part of me is tempted to scrap all the bracket stuff and rework the whole poem to be less rambling and perhaps a bit more rhythmic.