Nightmares and the Safety of Sunrise

[LunaDeLore]

Nightmares and the Safety of Sunlight

I am still burned and fearing the flame that nearly torched my existence. ----------- > As a reader "still" takes me back two steps, making it somewhat daunting. I think you could enhance this line by removing it.

She is like fire in the soul and you go back to heat your hands every time my winter skin gets to be too much. ---------> "to be" is wordy and awkward and the shift between the first and second person doesn't help. 

Sipping her in like cocoa, mumbling through chattering lips how you hate these icy months. -------> Sipping her is even you may consider dropping  "in"

But who are you again, dear? 

You look like you and sound like you, but what has become of your heart? -------> this line has a "big bad wolf" undertone

Surely this dream has compared you to another past work of art. ------> When I read this line a song goes off in my head. But when I read it omitting surely I don't have the problem.

An ex lover with wondering green eyes, swinging ways, and a broken smile I believed every time. ----> juxtaposition and punctuation come to mind; this line is a bit wordy too.

These dreams have a funny way of making me miserable, 

taunting me to relive every heartbreak 

and painting your beautiful face on the sins of thieves. 

Cadence,

I'm not sure how the title relates to the poem or where the "safety of sunrise" comes into play, but the theme is clear. I like the poem and think that you have a good piece to work with, and I hope my insights help during revision.

Good work.

Luna