Man of My Dreams
#6
I think the first 3 stanzas are begging for a little punctuation. Some periods planted throughout the poem would work wonders for the overall flow. I love the content, however, and feel like everyone has struggled with trying to get something "off their heart" that they wish wasn't there. I agree with Lizzie though! Can we fix the font size? Keep writing, 89! You have something good going here!

-DJesters
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Man of My Dreams - by 89layers - 09-12-2016, 01:43 AM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by kolemath - 09-12-2016, 02:18 AM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by 89layers - 09-12-2016, 02:30 AM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by operadiva - 09-12-2016, 05:04 AM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by 89layers - 09-12-2016, 10:14 AM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by DJesters - 09-13-2016, 03:08 AM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by TSPKNIP - 09-22-2016, 05:39 AM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by 18sawe - 04-13-2017, 09:25 PM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by Franklin'sMan - 04-17-2017, 04:51 PM
RE: Man of My Dreams - by headybeach - 04-24-2017, 12:59 AM



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