09-11-2016, 03:03 PM
I'm assuming stacks refers to stacks of books (as well as "library stacks"), stacks of stories in a building,
stacks of pages in a book, stories in a book, a life, and various metaphors for abstracts -- stacks of
thoughts, feelings etc.
Kudos, I've never seen "tuned mass dampers" used in a poem before (and you've even included its
concomitant "orb"!). But, call me old-fashioned, I'm thinking it's use is a bit too esoteric.
"like a teenage has spots" -- "teenager"?
... or Tom Wolfe
The poem makes half-decent, even linear, sense to me, but I have a tendency to construct my own
fanciful narratives and willfully misinterpret any bits that get in the way.
Anyway... a very interesting poem. I love its metafictional bent, it's solid imagery, and the thorough
job you've done in extending its metaphor too much.
I intend to mull it over a bit and return with
some trenchant crits based on my willful misinterpretations.
stacks of pages in a book, stories in a book, a life, and various metaphors for abstracts -- stacks of
thoughts, feelings etc.
Kudos, I've never seen "tuned mass dampers" used in a poem before (and you've even included its
concomitant "orb"!). But, call me old-fashioned, I'm thinking it's use is a bit too esoteric.
"like a teenage has spots" -- "teenager"?
... or Tom Wolfe
The poem makes half-decent, even linear, sense to me, but I have a tendency to construct my own
fanciful narratives and willfully misinterpret any bits that get in the way.
Anyway... a very interesting poem. I love its metafictional bent, it's solid imagery, and the thorough
job you've done in extending its metaphor too much.
I intend to mull it over a bit and return with some trenchant crits based on my willful misinterpretations.
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions